The main character has an imagine spot where a buddy of his cucks him out of his rental girlfriend. And it’s not just a random gag. It’s 8 full pages of barely-censored sexual intercourse in a manga that didn’t have any of that previously (as far as I know).
The worst part? The chapter ends with the dude crying. All the while having a boner from it.
Yeah… This isn’t a very pleasant reading experience.
The thing that frustrates me the most is that I actually think Rent a Girlfriend has a good premise. With good writing, I think it could’ve been the next Nisekoi. Instead, it’s become the next School Days.
Because established romances aren’t geared for narrative development, and certainly not as much as the romance being established, it’d likely just be a tertiary element to a main narrative in execution, I.e. something else would be going on causing some form of conflict the characters would have to navigate
Your concept sets itself up for being underwhelming in execution if that’s the main thing you want focused on
Yeah, you might be right. When I wrote my first light novel series that was about a tsundere hooking up with the main character early on, I found myself writing a lot about the secondary characters. Because as cute as I find tsundere fluff to be, you need some form of conflict.
I really liked the first episode of My Dress-up Darling. I think the thing that stands out the most to me is that it’s your typical loner and popular person have something in common story, but it’s done more believable than most. The main character is a hina doll craftsman, and the girl needs someone to help her sew because she loves cosplaying.
I mean, you eventually have to have the tsundere experience character development and become nicer. Because if they don’t, you have a situation where it’s like “Well, why are you still with them?” Mind you, this is coming from someone who probably loves tsunderes more than anybody else on the face of the planet.