Looking for a review on my unfinished Adventure Time fanfiction.

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I recently started writing an Adventure Time fanficition, as I needed to write something else than Fimfics. I have written 2 chapters so far and before I continue, I thought I it would be good to get some thoughts on what I have so far.
 
Any critique is helpful.
 
The 2 chapters can be read here:
 
Silence Our Names
 
Thank you so much for your help.
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