proofreaders for a vore fic?

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So I just finished writing a little something something and was wondering if some of you fine folks would care to give it a once over for me before it goes up on fimfiction.
 
as said, this is vore, specifically pregnant Chrysalis pred/pony and changeling prey, unwilling and willing, fatal and reincarnation respectively.
 
if this premise does not disgust you, then please give it a look! comments are enabled, so if you see anything that seems off, feel free to say something!
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