Okay, now I’m working on the second part of the fic. I’d like to have the story laid out so, when I’m writing, I have something to work with.
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6) Taking the idea from PonyPon, Fancy is going to pry the zebra for more information on the carriage, then boat, ride home. She doesn’t say much; it’s not that she doesn’t know New Equestrian (language) - she knows a little from her time under Lyrica - but she’s obviously crushed by her removal. Fancy is blissfully unaware of this.
7) The arrival home. I don’t really know what I’m doing for this point, so suggestions are craved,
8) Fancy’s getting older now, Zecora along with him. Royal Ribbon - yeah, she’s probably going to be his mum - plans to introduce him to his future wife. Zecora knows more New Equestrian at this point and we get some sort of cute “first date” fluff. Turns out Fleur is his future wife - damned if I don’t make her dress like
this, because why the hell not, it’s not as if I’m going for historic accuracy - and she’s nice enough, bit of a romantic, turns out she’s a general in the army. I’m not sure where to take their relationship: whether they legitimately feel something for each other (I kind of want to make a cute balcony scene for the two of them in the dead of night), whether it’s strictly business, whether Fancy loves Fleur more than she loves him. Give me a few pointers here, the story is still in its development stage.
Also, apparently, when they wed, Fancy looses all of his possessions to Fleur, including Zecora. That’ll be more important later.
9) Love is in the air, evidently. As a
proper colt must tend to the home and its affairs, he simply cannot go outside to the market: that’s servant’s work. So Zecora’s out and about in the market place when she notices, Big Macintosh going about his business. The story remarks that she’s been seeing him around lately, and, well, she’s attracted.
- Bonus Round - During all of this, Royal Ribbon is dying, and Zecora takes care of her even as Ribbon wrongfully calls her useless and yells racist slurs at her. Yet Zecora still pushes on, even when Fancy suggest hiring someone else for the task.
10) Insert some weird romantic plot where Zecora and Macintosh are meeting together secretly. It’s obviously taboo. Again, not many ideas for this one; I want to somehow connect Macintosh to Fleur. I’m thinking he stands out in the fields and oversees slaves. It calls the relationship into question.
11) Fancy notices that Zecora is getting slower, getting sick. Surprise, surprise, she’s pregnant. Well, Fleur’s gonna find out he’s sneaking around, discharge him, and the town ends up lynching him. Although honestly, I feel like that’s too…I don’t know, stereotypical? Dramatic? Any thoughts?
12) It ends up the babe’s a miscarriage. Oops.
13) We’re nearing the wedding date of Fleur and Fancy. Zecora literally has nothing left but her master, Fancy, and even he’ll be gone because she’ll technically belong to Fleur.
14) “You’ve suffered enough.”
Fancy has been trying to grant Zecora her freedom, but she keeps declining it (“I appreciate your noble attempt, but wherever I go I’ll be held in contempt.”). Finally, he manages to find a way to sneak her onto a boat heading for their version of Africa - again, suggestions for how he does this is appreciated - and the day of, they have their goodbyes. He’s walking to his mother’s room after her leave when he notices a box on the bed, which catches us up with the beginning. He opens it: inside is that plush rabbit, the one taken from him so long ago.
