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A vibrations and rumbles shook her body visibly as her cage moved on the rough ground. Her mind was ringing with a screech as her head felt heavy. Letting out a small groan, she opened up her eyes and was only met with blur.
 
Her throat scraped against itself when she let out a whine and ended up coughing. She raised her hoof to rub against her other closed eye but she felt a cloth bandage then her eye caught a glimpse of her chains. Her eye widened as the feeling of the cold chains were finally felt against her body.
 
Her body ached in pain, especially her flanks and hind legs, as she pulled herself onto her hooves. Her ears dropped as the scenery around her was noticed. All the howlers of her pack were pulling on carriages and boxes and the cubs were being put into their own carriage. Her heart was pounding against her chest which echoed in her headache.
 
She saw her care-taker ushering a cub into its carriage before looking at Beatz. Her eyes looked distant but upset as her ears dropped a bit at the hybrid’s state. Beatz opened her mouth, pressing herself against the steel bars as an attempt to get close, and let out a very small whine, her voice hoarse. Blueberry pressed her lips into a thin line as her eyes glistened before she turned away to busy herself with something else.
 
Her ears went down and her body slumped against the bars, feeling light-headed and extremely guilty. The stars were glistening and shimmering, as if indicating that they were watching the number one powerful pack move. It felt as if someone or something has their eyes set on the hybrid cub in judgement and intrigue.
 
Before she could lay down, her eye caught a very familiar cherry coloured mane. It widened up in fear and shock, causing her heart to drop to the pit of her stomach. His body was painted in bruises and blood like galaxies. His hair was a mess and no longer in a bun. He seemed like he tried to fight for so long and his wing was bent awkwardly.
 
“P…P-papa…?”
 
Her voice sounded so weak and in a whisper as her cage began moving again. All the howlers took one last look at their used to be territory before they began to move. But she barely paid attention to them as she was deeply focused on her dad’s pained expression and how distant it looked.
 
Her chest began heaving as she tried to pull on her hooves or get rid of her chains. Her breathing began getting labored as she let out yelps and whines, tears running down her cheek endlessly. The cubs looked at her with curiousity and tilted their heads. Some of the howlers barely glanced at her and some looked at her in pity, but the majority was in disappointment.
 
Her eye was set on her father as she called out his name but no sound escaped, her hoarse throat holding her back. Heaving in air, she felt dizzy again and something warm running down her hind leg. She didn’t even bother as she stumbled, her vision darkening little by little before her body hit the floor of her cage.
 
She watched helplessly as her dad seemed to be getting smaller and smaller as her cage was pulled away. A faint sound of snarls and clicking noise of the corrupted ones reached her ears. Slowly embracing the darkness, she caught multiple big figures circling her father’s body.
 
The corrupted howlers…
 
“Pa… pa…” She croaked out before a soft breath left her lips as she blacked out.
 
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh this is so messyyyyyyyyyyyyyy. I wanted to put all my effort into it but i was so unmotivated but it’s been so long since the last update on her story and dsjfkhdfsf what do you think?

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Background Pony #85E1
Well, the idea is okay, but some things could have done better.
 
The cage is too small and the wheels look useless, a wagon like that would run itself into the mud, snag behind even the smallest of obstacles on the road and it would be an absolute pain in the tail to pull to boot.
 
Speaking of pain in the tail, pulling a cart fastened to a tail can’t possible anything else but very painful to the owner of the tail, even if the wagon only holds a filly.
 
Why is her plot bandaged, did they forcefully remove her cutie-marks to make her unrecognizable? That is useless, as far as I know ponies get them because they show of their special talent in life, they basically (and as far as I know) return anyway because that IS their special talent.
 
Why the small cage and the overly done restrains, is it to break her spirit for a future master?
 
Anyway, my humble opinion, your mileage may vary. :)