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Yeah… I’ve decided to make somekind of a TF with a story…
 
Although this is the first time I have ever done this.
 
I know there’s one good friend of mine on DA that is Foxxy-arts does TFs… And I wanted to show her a TF art that I drew…
 
Alright here’s a story that I came up with for this TF art:
 
David was a young boy who was interested in dragons. He goes to school on weekdays with his mother. He has good classmate friends, but… he doesn’t like to be bullied. But on the weekend he goes out shopping with his mother. Rarely he gets a toy dragon once a week if he’s good. However his father is a very busy man… So he wouldnt be able to come back home on his work day. He stayed at work for extra money, But his father comes back home whenever he feels like it.
One day on a Saturday, David and his mother went out shopping again… However when they arrived to the toy store, David saw a dragon plush… the dragon plush had green spikes, purple scales, green eyes… David wanted that plush… However he doesn’t even know that is a My Little Pony plush… When he brought the plush to his mother… David’s Mother looked at the plush and she noticed the tag that says: “My Little Pony” David’s Mother refused to get this plush… She said: “I’m sorry dear, but… This dragon is from a girl’s show. So I’m not buying it.” David responded: “But mom… It’s a dragon plush… Not a girl’s plush.” David’s Mother said no and told David to put it back. David got sad and put back the plush where it belongs… When they arrive home, David went upstairs to his bedroom… When he got into the bedroom he notices the note that wasn’t supposed to be there… David got confused after seeing that not on the bed. David said: “Huh? That’s strange… There’s a note on my bed… I wonder what it says.” He came close to the note and he picked it up and looked at it… The note was turned out to be a old-fashioned scroll… David opened the scroll it was Written with ink… and it says:
“Dear, David.
I know you wanted something that you really
want but your mother doesn’t want to buy it.
Maybe you may not know what did it come from.
But I have something to cheer you up.
I will give you life-changing offer
so that way you would be happy than
ever…
I left a gemstone on the table for you, to
cheer up.
                     Best wishes, 
                            The dragon." 
David was confused after reading what it says… “life-changing offer”? What does it mean? What gemstone is the scroll talking about? David looked at the table near his bed… The gemstone was there, and it’s purple colored. David picked up the gemstone and in wonder: “Huh… Someone put some scroll on top of my bed and left a gemstone on my table… How weird…” After he said that. The Gemstone glowed green and flashed a bright light that it made David not to see for a while. After a while the light disappeared and David can be able to see now. David looked at his hand and notices that the gemstone is missing… David’s mother called David to know what’s going on… David’s Mother: “David!? What’s going on up there?!” David went on a panic as he hides the scroll under his pillow… David responded: “Nothing, mom. Nothing at all.” That was weird… Someone,left a scroll on the bed. The gemstone disappeared after being picked up… What happens next? David shrugged as he left the room and forget what just happened…
At midnight… David and his mother are sleeping in their bedrooms…
Until that night where David slept uncomfortable that somehow he had bad dream… David woke up in a shock, but somehow he doesn’t feel to good. David was carving for something that he wasn’t sure of… So he went downstairs to the kitchen. Before he enters the kitchen.. He noticed something when he walked pass by the mirror… The mirror didn’t reflect the shape of David… David went close to the mirror and looked at it… He’s normal according to the mirror… David scratched his head and said: “ Huh… I should’ve sworn there’s something going on… But it’s just my imagination… Before he goes to the kitchen somehow his face felt something stange… “Huh? What’s going on with my- GuH!?” His face extended into a reptilian snout of some sort. David started to panic as he looked at the mirror again and sees his muzzle face… David said in a panic mode: “H-Huh? Wha- What happened to my nose?” After he said that 2 fangs grew out of the sides of his mouth so the 2 fangs would show up when his mouth is closed. David felt worse than usual… David touches his 2 fangs that somehow made him like a freak of some sort. David: “F- FA- F- FANGS!?” but then his hand started to feel weird too. David looked at his hand as the nails began to sharp and 2 fingers merged together… then his ears began to grew outward. and somehow 3 points started to grow as the ears flattens. David felt efreaked out that something is happening to him… David: “G- GuH? Wha- No… What am I? YIPE!!!” his spine began to expand out behind him. Forming into a tail, and a spade grew out at the tail end. His legs began to shrink a little and his toes began to merge to 3 digits and sharpened the nails to have clawed feet. His pants started to fall down as his tail grew even bigger. Green spikes began to grow on the head as it was giving like a Mohawk. David started to breathe green-fire. Then he looked at his tail and said:Wha? N- No… What is happening to me?!”
Then his clothes disappear as his new form continues to process. His hair started to shrink back to his head and his eyes began to change color and his irises began to form into lizard-like irises. then… Pale green plates began to spread from his jaw to his tail end… he stopped shrinking and his ears completely flattened and became like green fan-like ears… then, purple scales began to spread on his nose, claws and tail. it spread it out very fast. David’s voice also changed to a younger voice. David:“What’s happening to me? Who am I turning into?” small green spike began to grow on his back and tail… David realized what he’s turning into…
David:“Wait… I think I know what I’m turning int- AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!” A sudden pain happened after the process is completely finished. David is no longer a human… He’s a fire breathing reptile now… David:“Wait… Green Spikes… Purple scales… That means… I’m a dragon… I’m a dragon. I’M A DRAGON. RAAAAAWWWWRR!!!!” David is excited that he is now a dragon… However he doesn’t know what’s the name of the dragon he had become… David thought to himself: “Wait… What’s that purple dragon’s name again…” But then somepony came through the door and as it turns out it was a purple unicorn with wings… Therefore… “Princess Twilight Sparkle”. Twilight saw her assistant as she walked by the door. Twilight:“There you are, Spike! I’ve been looking for you all day.” David heard the pony and he looked at her… David responded: “Woah… Who are you and who’s Spike?” Twilight:“Silly, Spike. It’s me Twilight and You’re Spike. Do you remember?” David just realized that purple dragon’s name is actually “Spike”. David responded that he doesn’t want to get in trouble with:“Oh… Uhh…. Yeah… Must’ve hit my head or somethin.” Twilight laughed and said:“Oh, uhh… Well Sorry to hear that you hit your head with something but you could come with me if you want to. I’ll be waiting outside for you.” and the Twilight left the room. David realized what that “life-changing offer” ment… David is now Spike and he’s in Equestra now. David:“Huh… I guess this offer wasn’t bad after all. I’ll get used to it.” and then left the room followed twilight as he started on his new life in a dragon’s life.
THE END?
 
And yeah… I know that I couldn’t think straight while writing this but it’s kinda cool.
 
So yeah… Enjoy this TF that I did.

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redweasel
Duck - "someone befriended them, saved them, coaxed them out of their shell, and showed them that sex is nothing to be afraid of. I’m kind of envious of that rape victim"

Fuzzbutt
@Tarkan809
 
the only thing I really care about are paragraphs. uh…
 
David was a young boy who was interested in dragons. He goes to school on weekdays with his mother. He has good classmate friends, but… he doesn’t like to be bullied.
On the weekend he goes out shopping with his mother. Rarely he gets a toy dragon once a week if he’s good. However his father is a very busy man… So he wouldnt be able to come back home on his work day. He stayed at work for extra money, But his father comes back home whenever he feels like it.
One day on a Saturday, David and his mother went out shopping again, however when they arrived to the toy store, David saw a dragon plush. The dragon plush had green spikes, purple scales, green eyes. David wanted that plush… However he doesn’t even know that is a My Little Pony plush.
When he brought the plush to his mother… David’s mother looked at the plush and she noticed the tag that says: “My Little Pony” David’s Mother refused to get this plush… She said: “I’m sorry dear, but… This dragon is from a girl’s show. So I’m not buying it.”
David responded: “But mom… It’s a dragon plush… Not a girl’s plush.”
David’s mother said no and told David to put it back. David got sad and put back the plush where it belongs.
When they arrived home, David went upstairs to his bedroom. When he got into the bedroom he noticed a note that wasn’t supposed to be there. David got confused after seeing that note on the bed. David said: “Huh? That’s strange. There’s a note on my bed. I wonder what it says.”
He came close to the note and he picked it up and looked at it… The note was an old-fashioned scroll. David opened the scroll and found it was written with ink, and it said:
“Dear, David.
I know you wanted something that you really
want but your mother doesn’t want to buy it.
You may not know what did came from.
But I have something to cheer you up.
I will give you a life-changing offer
so that way you would be happier than
ever.
I left a gemstone on the table for you, to
cheer up.
Best wishes,
  • D
David was confused after reading what it says. “life-changing offer? What does it mean? What gemstone is the scroll talking about?”
David looked at the table near his bed, and a purple colored gemstone was there. David picked up the gemstone and said in wonder: “Huh… Someone put some scroll on top of my bed and left a gemstone on my table. How weird…”
After he said that, the Gemstone glowed green and flashed a light so bright that it made David unable to see for a while. After a while the light disappeared and David was able to see again. David looked at his hand and noticed that the gemstone was missing.
David’s mother called David to know what’s going on. “David!? What’s going on up there?!”
David panicked as he hid the scroll under his pillow. David responded: “Nothing, mom. Nothing at all.”
That was weird. Someone left a scroll on his bed. The gemstone disappeared after being picked up. Nothing else happened, so David shrugged as he left the room and forgot about it.
At midnight, David and his mother are sleeping in their bedrooms…
That night David slept so uncomfortable that somehow he had a bad dream. David woke up in a shock, but somehow he didn’t feel to good. David had a craving for something that he wasn’t sure of, so he went downstairs to the kitchen.
Before he entered the kitchen, he noticed something when he walked past the mirror. David didn’t see his shape in it. David went up to the mirror and looked at it, but he looked normal according to the mirror.
David scratched his head and said, “Huh… I should’ve sworn there’s something going on. Maybe it’s just my imagination.”
Before he got to the kitchen though, his face felt something strange. “Huh? What’s going on with my- GuH!?”
His face extended into a reptilian snout of some sort. David started to panic as he looked at the mirror again and sees his face was a muzzle! David said in a panic, “H-Huh? Wha- What happened to my nose?!”
After he said that, 2 fangs grew out of the sides of his mouth that came out even when his mouth was closed. David felt worse than usual. David touched a fang and freaked out. “F- FA- F- FANGS!?”
Then his hand started to feel weird too. David looked at his hand as the nails began to sharpen and 2 fingers merged together. Then his ears began to grew outward. and somehow 3 points started to grow as the ears flattened.
David felt freaked out that something is happening to him. “Wha- No… What am I? YIPE!!!”
His spine began to expand out behind him, forming into a tail, and a spade grew out at the tail end. His legs began to shrink a little and his toes began to merge to 4 digits, the nails sharpening to have clawed feet. His pants started to fall down as his tail grew even bigger. Green spikes began to grow on the head as it was giving like a Mohawk.
David suddenly breathed green-fire. Then he looked at his tail and said:Wha? N- No… What is happening to me?!”
His clothes disappeared as his new form continues to progress. His hair shrank back to his head and his eyes began to change: the irises turning green, his pupils began to form into lizard-like slits. Pale green plates began to spread from his jaw to his tail end.
He stopped shrinking and his ears completely flattened and became like green fan-like ears. Then, purple scales began to spread on his nose, claws and tail. it spread it out very fast.
David’s voice also changed to a younger voice. David:“What’s happening to me? Who am I turning into?”
When small green spike began to grow on his back and tail, David almost realized what he’s turning into, “Wait… I think I know what I’m turning int- AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!”
With a sudden pain, the process was completely finished. David was no longer a human, but a fire breathing reptile now.
“Wait… Green Spikes… Purple scales…” David said, “That means… I’m that dragon. I’m a dragon. I’M A DRAGON. RAAAAAWWWWRR!!!!”
David was excited that he was now a dragon, however he didn’t know the name of the dragon he had become. David thought to himself, “Wait… What’s that purple dragon’s name again…”
Then somepony came through the door, a purple unicorn with wings. “Princess Twilight Sparkle” saw her assistant as she walked by the door, saying “There you are, Spike! I’ve been looking for you all day.”
David looked at the pony and responded: “Woah… Who are you, and who’s Spike?”
“Silly Spike,” Twilight said with amusement, “It’s me Twilight and You’re Spike. Don’t you remember?”
David now knew that purple dragon’s name is actually “Spike”, and he didn’t want to get in trouble with the winged unicorn, so he said “Oh… Uhh…. Yeah… Must’ve hit my head or somethin.”
Twilight laughed and said:“Well Sorry to hear that you hit your head with something, but I need you to come with me. I’ll be waiting right outside.”
Twilight left the room, as David realized what that “life-changing offer” meant. David walked out of the room to find he was in Equestra now.
“Huh,” David said, “I guess this offer wasn’t bad after all. I’ll get used to it.”
Then he followed twilight and started on his new life as a dragon.
THE END?
 
enjoy.
redweasel
Duck - "someone befriended them, saved them, coaxed them out of their shell, and showed them that sex is nothing to be afraid of. I’m kind of envious of that rape victim"

Fuzzbutt
cute! the story’s okay. I thought twilight just kind of walked into his mom’s kitchen though. oh the grammar falls apart at the start of the transformation, not that I particularly care about that. “David slept uncomfortable” “he had bad dream.”
 
also use more paragraphs. each paragraph should be one idea, with clear separation between them, not more than three or four sentences. if you let the ideas just get all tangled together in a giant paragraph, then it’s hard for us to imagine what’s happening. let your thoughts stream out in a giant tangle if you like, but go back and organize them. sculpt your writing like clay, instead of just leaving it raw and unrefined.
 
like a single paragraph of him waking up from a bad dream. then a single paragraph of him entering the kitchen and passing by a mirror. then a single paragraph of him looking in the mirror confused what’s happening to his nose. and so on like that. nothing too crazy. just look for places where you can end a thought, and do a paragraph there, before going to the next thought.